Published May 12, 2026 from S&S/Saga Press
1: I assume the repeated word choice is intentional, but I think it would read more smoothly if the language were varied.
2: The descriptions feel distant and detached in a way that’s effective for putting us in the character’s mindset. The repeated sentence structure creates a nice rhythm.
1: Some interesting character details, but the language is a little abstract and hard to get a hold on.
2: These more specific details are helpful for establishing the scene.
1: The descriptions feel kind of vague. Specific images or anecdotes might be more effective.
2: I like the comparison and its tying together of cultural references.
Verdict: Some compelling ideas but the writing isn’t really grabbing me.
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