1: Fun to start out with the narrator’s take on the concept of coding. But the language is a little vague and abstract, so it’s hard to get a hold on what’s being discussed.
2: Repeated word choice.
1: Some decent scene-setting.
2: The descriptions are maybe a little simplistic, but they get across some useful character information.
1: Interesting for the narrator to address another character in second person. It’s a quick indication of their closeness.
2: This is a sweet anecdote.
3: Slipping in some character information from the side.
1: Kind of a strange image. Hard to picture letters that are glowing and also opaque.
2: Repeated word choice.
3: A typo? Awkward...
4: I like the anecdote, but the language feels a little on-the-nose.
Verdict: I’m interested but not quite drawn in.
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