1: A nice touch how it incorporates the chapter title into the narration.
2: Some solid imagery to introduce the setting and his connection to it.
1: I like how it specifies the changes in the landscape that make his home country seem unfamiliar to him.
2: Quick, effective descriptions to show the narrator’s unwelcome reception.
It’s a little wordy and somewhat on the abstract side, but the details are specific enough to give useful character information.
The direct language and the flat tone give the memory a detached, distant feeling.
Verdict: I’m interested enough to read more.



















