1: I’m listening.2: He would be, wouldn’t he.
1: This man sounds like he may be the worst person in the world.
2: I appreciate the attention to detail, but I’m having trouble picturing the layout of the camp.
1: Definitely a strong candidate for the worst person in the world. I like his smug inner voice, but would prefer specific details over abstract descriptions.
2: I like this image, but again, wouldn’t mind more detail. For example, what species are the trees?
3: Sounds like a rhetorical question.
1: Seems like a guy you should probably listen to.
2: Unsurprising but a nice character detail.
3: I like the colorful dialogue, but the level of whimsy is maybe a little excessive.
4: Sounds like a you problem.
1: Nice detail, the narrator has such a rude inner voice.
2: Kind of strange it wasn’t mentioned sooner that there’s a crowd watching.
Verdict: I’m interested but not totally drawn in.
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