1: Nice opening, I like the way it comes at the story from the side.
2: The word choice gives him a very distinctive inner voice.
3: Some nice character tidbits.
4: Some interesting worldbuilding details. I like the idea of a dragon being able to change a person’s physique.
1: I can see the overly deliberate writing style becoming tedious, but for the moment I’m enjoying it.
2: I like the details of the setting.
1: These descriptions feel a little abstract, not the most effective way to impart character information.
2: Maybe a bit lacking in self-awareness?
Verdict: Slightly on the dry side, but I’m intrigued enough to continue.
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