1: What type of weeds, if you don't mind saying?
2: A nice image, but the rhyme is a little awkward.
3: I’m a fan of interesting plant behavior, but does the flower have a name?
4: A weird description, I’d usually say that you lift a camera to your eye.
1: I like the idea of a camera lens that can reveal magic. But if he’s looking through the peephole, he’s not actually seeing through the lens.
2: Nice description.
1: Does it take expertise to press a button on a camera?
2: Unless camera technology developed much faster in this world, I don’t think this particular camera could be centuries old.
3: I like this imagery.
4: I don’t mind an occasional one-sentence paragraph for effect, but four of them in a row seems excessive.
1: What does it mean to drop something hard?
2: Awkward phrasing, it feels like there’s a disconnect before and after the comma.
Verdict: It’s not quite drawing me in.
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