1: Repeated word choice.
2: Repeated word choice.
3: I like this description.
1: I approve of the narrator’s judginess.
2: Weird to use “spindling” instead of “spindly,” especially since there’s two other -ing words in the phrase.
Not very thrilled by this worldbuilding. It drops a bunch of names in quick succession and doesn’t give any context for them.
1: I found this a little hard to follow.
2: I like this description of mentally hacking into biometrics data.
Verdict: Slightly rough, but has some fun concepts and narration.
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