Published Jan. 6, 26 from Wednesday Books
1: Decent opening. I like how the phrasing suggests that something may in fact be amiss, despite the narrator’s insistence otherwise.
2: Weird to repeat her name when she’s the only character so far.
Nice character introduction. I like the simplicity of calling him a monster with no elaboration, and contrasting that with him caring about his husbandly duties.
1: Some awkward roundabout phrasing.
2: Repeated word choice.
3: I like the personification of the clouds.
4: The image of the house atop the clouds is a little vague to me.
5: Bonus points for mentioning the tree species.
6: Nice imagery.
1: Repeated word choice.
2: Her feelings about the clouds give a nice view into their relationship and her current state of mind.
Verdict: Fun but probably not for me.
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