I’m always happy to start out with a lecture about fossils.
1: Blasphemy.
2: I’m a little concerned about her business model.
3: A solid character detail.
4: I’m not getting a strong image of the layout of the store.
1: A nice character-establishing anecdote.
2: Seems unsanitary.
3: Sounds like she might have gotten ripped off.
4: Yeah, she definitely got ripped off.
1: The interaction feels a bit thin. The dialogue and descriptions aren’t indicating much about their characters.
2: I’m not finding the descriptions very evocative.
3: I like the off-hand reference to how magic works.
Verdict: An interesting setup but the writing feels distant.
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